I like the structure of the poem, although not quite sure what it is (the structure, not the poem). I like the rhythm and the images it conveys, too. Like your "tired eyes". I know what you mean, especially when contrasted against the early morning sun.
29 comments:
Nice one, tanka's can be such fun.
Nice one! :)
Take Care
Like this!
Blessings
Hi Christine, it's taken me some
time to get the hang of writing
a tanka - Thanks!
Thanks, Fatima!
Thank you, Bethe
i haven't tried this form yet....
nice play of words ~
Tanka is not easy, particularly if you achieve the goals of using metaphor and simile. You do it justice!
Hello Heaven, It takes some time,
but the process is enjoyable.
Thank you.
Hi there Kim. Yes I found out
the tanka takes thought to be
succinct and lovely.
Thank you so much for your
generous comments.
Simple and cute...:)
Nice one :)
Thanks for visiting my blog :)
You are welcome and thank you for
returning the favor V.
Hmmm
This one bring conflicting thoughts
Must delve deeper....
Rock on!
I always find tanka very difficult. Yours is quite beautiful and doesn't seem at all forced. Lovely.
Hi Rex, thank you for thinking
on this.
Lola, thank you so much.
You paint such a complete word picture here.
thank you short poems, I tried.
Personally, I love tankas... this one was awesome!!!
Hey there, Opaque - good to
see you - Thank you!
very nice
Hi Rachel, thank you!
Very nice offering here, I liked it! Thanks for sharing!
LV -hi, thank you for your
kind words.
I like the structure of the poem, although not quite sure what it is (the structure, not the poem). I like the rhythm and the images it conveys, too. Like your "tired eyes". I know what you mean, especially when contrasted against the early morning sun.
Greetings from London.
Hi CubaninLondon, thank you for the
pop-in and for the careful read-
I appreciate that.
I like the idea of tears being jiggled from your eyes, a very vivid description
Hi Green Poet. Enjoy your blog, haven't seen any crafts lately.
Thank you!
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