A comet struck the shelter.
His zealot eyes pierced mine.
Sunlight appeared, sunlight on crack.
Crazy reds with long fingers. I had
a dose of reality that night;
As his mouth struck my mouth
again and again.
Hi Scribbler. Wow! The ultimate compliment to read a writer's work more than once. I'm so happy and humbled. I really tried to make this a complete short story.
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Kisses amongst butterfly minds..this lovely piece felt very jarring...flighty..a captivating write..Jae
Good Morning Jaerose! Thank you
for your comments.
It was so intriguing I've read it a dozen times, yet it doesn't leave anything unsaid or incomplete. Really stunning!
Hi Scribbler. Wow! The ultimate compliment to read a writer's
work more than once. I'm so happy and humbled. I really tried to
make this a complete short story.
Thank You!
Beautiful piece
The poem is enchanting. Cheers.
Hi Sheilagh, thank you!
Hey there Chris, thank you so much!
A short story well said in the verse.
Oooo Nothing beats a good long kissing session, well... almost nothing.... LOL
Thank you, Nanka!
Hi Dreamer2, yep extended kissing
can be mesmerizing. Thank you.
Lovely work.
Thank you, Angel.
amazing,
I will follow your blog :)
hello! thanks for your comment :) i hope we can follow each other, I'll follow u back then :)
Andressa, what a pretty name.
Thanks for following my blog &
I shall follow yours with
pleasure.
Hello Pramudita, I hope we can
follow each other. Thanks for
visiting!
exciting.
Wonderful use of the words. Nicely done imagery.
Thank you, Jessica.
Hey Shauna, thank you!
Meteor struck,
Shelter,
Shelter,
From the storm?
A kiss,
With weight,
Of love, lust, and need,
So much at once would break a lesser woman and create a lesser poem. :)
Hi sweet Anonant. Your responses
are always a thrill for me. Thank you so much!
Have a good night.
:)
Magical
Rock on!
It's that kiss, those words showing me what lovers do, that gets me.
Hi A! likewise :}
Hello Rex, Thanks for your zeal!
Hello Andreas, thank you for
the thoughtful comment.
Woah. I love this! So awesome:D
Hey there, Tay Tay! This poem was
fun to think of and write.
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