An abandoned wife weeps and dips, her heart
is heavy under the sway of long days.
She feels mocked my the moons' knowing observation.
Her life eroded by the humid days that lap against
spine of her need.
Her only companion, the nights' quiet breathing.
Cynthia
29 comments:
lovely poem..
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Awww sad to be so neglected and wanting your loved one to notice you.
Lovely, sad, prose.
Phew, may her god bless her!
Thank you, Orange Tree!
Yes, he will return and her patience will be retroactively rewarded.
Thank you, Dreamer!
Loved your poem.
Hi Andy, oh yes. Thank you!
Ok, I see where you posted your comment now, on my 'about' page.
If you look under the poem title there's a place there which says 'comments' click on that ands it ought to open a page for you to scroll down to leave a comment in the box.
Thank you :)
Oh, okay, I'm so used to looking beneath the poem that I didn't notice the link under the title-
the link [type] is very light.
Thanks for the quick reply, Dreamer.
aw so sad hope she finds happiness.
Ah, so beautifully you expressed the life of a lady, Lovely!
Oh, her husband will return,
Sheila. Thank You
Thank you, so much Saru.
wonderful mix of delicate yet haunting..night's breathing...great write..Jae
Strangely this post reminds me of a poem, "The Forsaken Merman".
Nice read.
Cheers,
Blasphemous Aesthete
Thank you, Jaerose for the gorgeous
compliment! Please do return. :}
hi BA. I pulled up and read the Forsaken Merman and the quality
of yearning and melancholy are
present in both poems for sure.
My poem is dedicated to Penelope
the faithful wife, who husband finally returned after 20 years.
"Her only companion, the nights' quiet breathing" Magic.
Hi Marita, thank you for the
kind compliment.
An abandoned wife,
Weeps and dips,
Her heart,
Her only companion,
The nights'
Quiet breathing.
I love it!
Evocation of solitude,
And it's attendant sadness.
peace
Hi Anonant! Thank you for your
generous critique.
Lovely and so sad!
lovely lines..lovely lines
Madeline, Penelopes' husband eventually returns, after a mere
20 years.
Thank you!
Hey there, Sorcerer - thank you!
This is sad.. your words are lovely ~
Hi Heaven, yes melancholy, however her husband does return after a
decade or two.
aww! melancholia!i've known her so well.
Hi Jelah. Sometimes melancholia can
be seductive. Thank you!
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